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Communique: Number 4 by ~chocolaterot:iconchocolaterot:





#1

Once upon a time, the earth was flat in imagination.
The earliest man found the wheel; all touch and accident.
The later man found the curvature of the world; shadows and calculations.
This is the secret of existence:
   Life traces out in circles, revolutions and rotations spin into minutes,
      cycle into hours, spiral into years.
Living is circular, even when turned upside, it draws the same centripetal path.
A sphere spinning around and around to the rhythm of infinity,
   exfoliating and reincarnating,
      marching on and on and on….

#2

I have only seen my father cry twice.
His stance mute, while the air mixes with wails and words
   he makes speeches amongst sobbing
      “I’m sorry dad, I’m sorry…”  the rest cuts to wordless noise
      -loud, unbound, animal in pain.
Anguish is a heavy scent. Smoke to breathe in, burns on the tongue.
My grandfather died the day the baby had a 105 fever.
My grandmother has taught me to be superstitious.
And so I believe in Karma, that dreams are remnant flavors of ghosts.
   That the soul recreates.
Maybe now is when my baby brother gains a soul;
   when my grandfather dies, and my mother falters,
      when my father cries, and my grandmother sleeps alone.
I envision her small, sturdy body, standing over the broken back of the land
   and under the scarred belly of the sky.
Caught between heaven and ground, she is heartbreaking.

#3

The world is split into three echoes,
   Sky- land- water-
      Fins and fur and feathers.
Plumage brushes soft as hair against skin.
The mind’s eye sees fish turn to falcon
   at the instant where fins spread like wings.
Now what do you name a fish with feathers?
Our opposites are merely reflections,
   complementing, till they become components.

#4

For every piece of memory,
   there lies the whole of a person ever after.
©2005-2010 ~chocolaterot
:iconchocolaterot:

Author's Comments

the assignment was to make a poem out of a fixed title, so i just made the poem out of the BaReSt definition of 'communique' (an offical annoucement)
In the making of this, i have been living high off of words for more or less a week,
days of being high off of words and staying well past midnight, ignoring homework, pestering brilliant people to critique me, and listening to awesome music...

Casey goes pee
Casey drinks green tea
Casey is a mad poet
with no apologies

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:iconecho-si:
Very creative approach. I think there may be too many semi-colons, and there's a lot of passive voice that you may want to reconsider. Still, I really like the piece. Very nice.

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do your part. love your mother. :earth:
Greenpeace [link] :sun: DATA [link]
:peace:
:icontattered-stars:
I absolutely frikking love this with wild passion.

Its extraordinary and brilliant, it made my heart skip a beat. This is a favorite for sure! How delicious.

Sincerely bravo! Keep these gems coming dearie! :heart:

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:frail:If vain our toil, we ought to blame the culture, not the soil.-Alexander Pope:frail:
:iconshishilyn:
I love how you bolded things cuz now I get it so much more! lol I love this even more now, if that's possible. I want you to read my Rapunzel story. I LOVE YOU CASEYFISH! *SQUISH*

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... it's a FISHY
:iconpatrick-j-reynolds:
very beautifully said. i know nothing of form, but it sounded good in my head

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-i don't think it will ever die-
:iconchocolaterot:
I know nothing about form either.
so I guess I was totally wrong in imagining you and your life? (the whole wavy thick brown hair thing (but maybe if you let it grow it'd be thick brown and wavy..?) and I can't tell with the eyes, or your family)
but it was still fun guessing.

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he walks like hes got music in his head
he has eyes like the sky
and lips shaped like pink frosting cake roses....
letter to a dead girl: i hope you are somewhere
:iconpatrick-j-reynolds:
i do have long hair brown and brown eyes

the pic is old... but a close friend took it and i loved the moment in time. i was so arrogant and empowered

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-i don't think it will ever die-
:iconvestrit:
the first stanza is by far my favorite, but it takes nothing away from the others.

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vestrit says do as vestrit says
:iconchocolaterot:
This is Paul

yaya

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he walks like hes got music in his head
he has eyes like the sky
and lips shaped like pink frosting cake roses....
letter to a dead girl: i hope you are somewhere

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